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How can a three-page short story be too long?

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By Brandi Reissenweber
Published: March 15, 2011
Brandi Reissenweber
Brandi Reissenweber
Q: My writer’s group agreed that my recent short story submission was too long, but it’s only three double-spaced pages. How is that possible?

A: Fiction comes in all sizes, from flash fiction (stories of just a page or two) to novels of hundreds of pages. Length alone, however, doesn’t dictate whether a fiction is too long or too short. A three-page story can drag if there’s not enough forward momentum and a twenty-page story can zip if every element is in place and tension is well negotiated. That being said, each work of fiction does have its own appropriate length. Your job is to find that perfect length. To do this, focus on the craft and make sure that each and every element receives close assessment during revision. If there are scenes or characters that are underdeveloped, your story is too short. If you include, for example, unnecessary exposition or a setting that is too exhaustively detailed, your story is too long.

It will help to zero in on the scope of the conflict. Conflict between characters can be like molasses: shapeless and viscous. Still, you have to isolate a portion of it and give it form. Let me give you an example: A couple’s eighteen-year relationship is fraught with conflict. That’s a whole messy sludge of molasses. Perhaps you want to focus on the end of that relationship. What story do you want to tell? The saga of their divorce, from the tortured affairs to the drawn out court battles, could fill a novel. On the other hand, the moment in the grocery store when the wife witnesses two teenagers making out in the frozen foods aisle and realizes she doesn’t have that kind of heat for her husband might make for an intriguing flash fiction. Each story comes from the same couple with the same history. It’s easy for the conflict to spread if you don’t contain it.

This question of scope can be confused by the fact that our characters are motivated by their past. In fact, there’s often an underlying conflict—the ground situation—that the conflict of the story aggravates. In Raymond Carver’s short story “So Much Water So Close to Home,” Stuart and his friends find a woman’s dead body while on a fishing trip. They continue with their trip instead of heading back immediately to call the police. This decision causes Claire, Stuart’s wife, to reconsider the nature of the man she married. This certainly isn’t the first problem in an otherwise rosy marriage. The current conflict aggravates something that’s been there all along: an underlying threat of violence between husband and wife, and Claire’s sense of powerlessness. The ground situation is addressed in the story, but the thrust of the unfolding action focuses on Stuart’s choice and Claire’s reactions to that choice.

Once you determine scope of a story, you’ll be better equipped to make choices about what should stay and what should go, what moments need to be fully developed and which ones can be only referred to briefly. Scope can take some figuring, but it’s well worth it when it helps guide your decisions in revision.
Brandi Reissenweber teaches fiction writing and reading fiction at Gotham Writers' Workshop and authored the chapter on characterization in Gotham's Writing Fiction: The Practical Guide. Her work has been published in numerous journals, including Phoebe, North Dakota Quarterly and Rattapallax. She was a James C. McCreight Fiction Fellow at the Wisconsin Institute for Creative Writing and has taught fiction at New York University, University of Wisconsin and University of Chicago. Currently, she is a visiting professor at Illinois Wesleyan University.

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BRANDI REISSENWEBER from ILLINOIS said:
Hi all, I’m glad to see such a wonderful conversation taking place here! Joan, Mindi and Irene, thanks for the kind words.

Marguerite, your current short story is defiantly one in which you’ll want to consider scope. This is a big conflict and there are many focused stories within the larger story of an individual’s struggle with chronic illness. What part of that conflict do you want to tell? You might focus by zeroing in on a specific time in this man’s illness—when he was first diagnosed, for example, or when he made a major transition in physical functionality. Also, consider whose story you want to tell. You might explore his experience of learning of his diagnosis. Or you might tell the story of how his wife handled his physical transitions.
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IRENE SCHURTER from CANADA said:
This article answers the question very well. I like to think of short stories as 'snaphots'. A picture really is worth a thousand words, as they say. I have written a short story in memory of my brother, which I hope to publish one day soon. Before he died, he told me about a pain-filled familial incident that had happened to him in childhood. None of our other siblings believed it to be true, which caused him added pain. So, I have tried to express his painful experience in a snapshot story involving him with only one other main character and a third character as bystander. I believe my story is approximately 1350 words/ five double spaced pages.
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MINDI ANDERSON from ILLINOIS said:
Brandi: You have a knack for tackling those plaguing writer conundrums. Thanks for sharing your wisdom!
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JOAN DIMASI from MASSACHUSETTS said:
This is a good article. It's true. Writing isn't about how long it is; it's about the quality. The books I enjoy reading, or articles, or stories have to hold my interest. If they don't, my mind begins to wonder and I'm not getting anything out of it anyway.
MARILYN CROSBIE from CANADA said:
Hi Marguerit:
Have you considered making this an essay rather than a short story? It sounds like a rather factual piece that you want to write, and I think that the essay genre might suit your purpose better than a short story format.
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