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Amy's Own, a novel

An evaluation of an agent query letter
By Marla Miller
Published: August 2, 2010
Marla Miller
Marla Miller

The query letter

Dear ________:

What constitutes love? Is it possible to recalibrate after a lifetime of accumulating baggage?

My novel Amy’s Own (approx. 80,000 words) follows the provocative dynamics between 42-year-old Amy Harrington and her mother.   

Charlene, chronic partners with her gin on the rocks, bimonthly dye job and mani-pedi, and deliciously uncensored commentary, has always been “Mother,” not “Mom.”   

Amy’s childhood of bobbing and weaving like an alert boxer evolves into their pattern of verbal head-butting, chiseled and finely tuned with age. Now, Amy must find a new path with her mother after her father unexpectedly dies, his affair is exposed, and Amy’s discarded first love returns.   

But how can Amy deal with her own upended reality when Charlene’s setting her dead husband’s E-Z Boy and favorite beer cooler on fire in the driveway? How is she going to make any headway when Charlene padlocks her house—from the inside?  

This is a story about how we can still feel bonds even with those who have neglected us. It’s about finding one’s way, to meet in the middle or even take the extra step—and finally connect with those essential to one’s life.

A complete manuscript of Amy’s Own is available upon request.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you.

Sincerely,

[Name withheld]

Want Marla to critique your agent query letter?

Send your letter to marketingthemuse@gmail.com. Be sure to use the subject line "The Writer Query Letter Critique." Queries for nonfiction and fiction (all genres) are welcome.

Marla Miller, a writer herself, teaches Marketing the Muse Workshops at the Southern California Writers' Conference and the Santa Barbara Writers Conference. Her Quick Query Critique video segments are available at www.marketingthemuse.com.
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MARLA MILLER from CALIFORNIA said:
Kat,
How lovely of you to take the time to share this with me.
Thank you and GOOD LUCK selling the' bejesus' out of your novel....:)
Marla
KAT WARD from CALIFORNIA said:
Marla: thank you for your thoughts on my query letter so long ago. I'm happy to report that my novel is now in print via my partners' start-up indie publishing company. I just got the ebook up at Smashwords and am working on getting it onto Amazon. Thanks for all your help and encouragement.
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