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Say It Out Loud, a nonfiction book

AN EVALUATION OF A QUERY LETTER FOR A BOOK

By Marla Miller
Published: May 2, 2011
Marla Miller
Marla Miller
The query letter

Dear ________:

In 2010 newspapers nationwide printed over 36,000 stories related to sex crimes. Senator Scott Brown, actor Tyler Perry, Dancing With the Stars celebrity Cheryl Burke, and Precious actress Mo’Nique are just a few well-known personalities revealing stories of sexual abuse. Allegations within the Roman Catholic Church and the use of the internet by sexual predators have caught the attention of every major network. Media exposure of these high-profile cases has opened the door for others to break their silence of sexual abuse.

But what happens next? Breaking the silence is only the first step. How does one navigate the journey to healing once the wounds are exposed?

Say It Out Loud: Revealing and Healing the Scars of Sexual Abuse provides proven strategies for healing. More than 70 personal journal entries authenticate the strategies presented in the 55,000-word manuscript, making Say It Out Loud unparalleled in a market aimed at victims and their families, therapists and educators.

I hold a bachelor's degree in special education and a master's degree in counseling. My professional credentials combined with personal experience in therapy give me both objective and subjective perspectives of the therapeutic process, making me uniquely qualified to write this book.

I write a health and wellness column for [Blank], online local news published by the [Blank] Media Group. I’ve written for the [Blank] and [Blank] National Network’s online journal; blog on [Blank]; and maintain a website: [Blank].

Sincerely,

[Name withheld]

The critique


Want Marla to critique your book query?

Send your query letter to marketingthemuse@gmail.com. Be sure to use the subject line "The Writer Query Letter Critique." Queries for nonfiction and fiction (all genres) are welcome, and critiques are free.

Marla Miller, a writer herself, teaches Marketing the Muse Workshops at the Southern California Writers' Conference and the Santa Barbara Writers Conference. Her Quick Query Critique video segments are available at marlamiller.com.
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MARLA MILLER from CALIFORNIA said:
YES, they want to see how this nonfiction will flow on the page so give them 2 good bullets----weed out everything else that's extraneous to this goal: SHOW don't TELL-
hope this helps & keep us posted!
marla
www.marlamiller.com
3 stars
ALICE POYNOR from SOUTH CAROLINA said:
I've done the same thing as this writer but I think the problem is that I don't want to reveal in a query letter what is the whole reason for buying the book1 Feels like you're giving away too much. I thought it was a good query and would be worth taking a look at even as is.
5 stars
JENNIE DUGAN from OHIO said:
Marla, To be more specific about the strategies, would it work to give one specific strategy and say how it's different? Or would an editor or agent want to see a few bulleted examples? I know I do the same thing, with generalizing something I think is groundbreaking, and I know that weakens it, but I'm not sure how much is too much.
Thanks so much.
Jennie Dugan
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