The query letter

Dear Ms. Miller:

I watched your review of the query letter for The Ugandan Affair on The Writer website, and upon reading the submitted letter, agreed with your assessment of it. I value your opinion and would like to have my query letter critiqued as well.
 
“Retreat, plan, attack.” Three simple words passed from father to daughter that become Sunny Whitaker’s mantra. Her father, Daniel, the son of a New York mob enforcer, teaches her that revenge is an acceptable response to those who hurt her or do her an injustice. She learns her lessons so well that when she commits her first murder at the age of 12, he compliments her on a job well done, and she uses his words to justify her future actions. But it is her husband’s killing that causes her to run from the police and begin to reflect on her life and wonder if her father’s teachings were, in fact, correct.
 
From the betrayal by her first love, to her marriage to a prominent attorney, Sunny’s 39-year journey crosses all the lines of human experience, while still leaving her with hope for the future. Journey of a Killer is a character-driven story of love and murder (93,330 words) that explores the question: How much of what we know comes from our parents, and how right are those teachings?
 
Three of my short stories have been published: one in [Blank], one as a winning entry in [Blank] contest, and one through my writers group, which published an anthology of its members’ stories. In addition to taking several writing classes, I recently participated in [Blank] agent panel.
 
If you’d like to read my completed manuscript, please contact me, and I will happy to send it to you. Thank you for your time.
 
Sincerely,

[Name withheld]